Helen's feedback of the script:
- First half is boring
- Second half is better
- Discussing Etsy clothes in studio is a bit flat
- Making the clothes - presenters become us - they are the link between the audience and the guest
- Lost the fun - how its written and delivered brings the energy
- Teddy comes from the old edwardian style
- 'Steals' means a bargin - segment title will be changed to 'Styles of the Season' as the trends we've picked aren't bargins and 'Steals' would be misleading
Helen said we need to define our mission statement and then the dialogue for the script will come naturally.
Mission statement: The show that helps you take current fashion trends and style them in ways to help you stand out from the crowd.
Katie and I believe that this is the mission statement we set out at the beginning of the project, we will add it to the beginning of the script as the presenters walk out so the audience know what our aim in from the first few lines.
One of the main things Helen said was that Styles of the Season is a bit boring and like a list. Which is right - Katie and I were struggling to make it sound interesting because we were bored of it ourselves. Our main task was to try and make Styles of the Seasons more upbeat and fun - there needs to be more 'banter' between the presenters and it needed to be more of a conversation than a list. To do this I did some research on the fashion segments on This Morning:
I watched an episode of This Morning on the 27th March, they had fashion expert, Lisa Snowdon, in to talk about floral patterns ready for spring.
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| Floral fashion on This Morning |
Reflection:
Lisa, Phillip and Holly had conversations about the fashion while it was on the models.
Lisa had a few 'play on words' which made the dialogue flow better, e.g. "deal of the day", "bold and bright", "flower power", "best buy of the week", "floral on floral", "best of the bunch"
Phillip and Holly reactions such as "love it", "and "does that come with the bag?", "gorgeous, beautiful", "a bodysuit makes life so much easier" - they put their own experiences / opinions on the outfits
Phillip and Holly may be confirming things the audience might be thinking e.g. "it's like having a nude heel"
Maybe we could mention that the clothing website has a deal on at the moment - Lisa explains that Accessorise have a spend £25 get £5 off deal at the moment - "spring bling"
"Think of summer holiday - only have to wear sandals with it" - linking it in with upcoming weather / activity
"They come in black as well"
"Floral and denim are a match made in heaven"
"Flares are everywhere - making a real revival"
"Gentle way to do floral" if people don't want to wear bright bold flowers - soft muted, pinks and beiges
Bargain jeans - spend a bit more on... but save on the jeans
Floral flock - the colour "feels more spring than high summer" - could talk more about colours and why these colours are chosen
Upbeat music helps fun, upbeat conversation
Floral background to link in with fashion - we will be having a flower wall featured in the set which will link to the Spring / Summer fashion
Lisa would add bits of advice e.g. you can pop this dress in the suitcase - it doesn't crinkle or wrinkle, wear with sandals for holiday, or a heel for a summer party, wedding etc
This was only a small segment at 6 minutes but they fitted in 5 models in this short space of time. They were rushing and Philip said things like "oh quickly now" so we could see they were rushing slightly. We will have a little bit extra on this segment (currently at 7 minutes) so we should easily be able to fit in good conversation like this.
Now I have heard different ways of making conversation and a few 'play on words', I will help Katie to try and incorporate some of these into her half of the script, specifically in the Styles of the Season segment to make it more interesting and fun for the audience.
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